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| Date | 11-Jan-2010 |
| Story | Guy's Night ~ by his_response |
| Message | wow! wow! An incredibly passionate piece of writing ~ your best yet! I loved everything about it, your words, your style, the subject matter, the originality. For some reason I feel that your writing has just taken on a new level in this piece. Keep up this excellent work. |
| Date | 11-Jan-2010 |
| Story | Dress Rehearsal ~ his_response |
| Message | I found this to be an emotive piece of erotica certainly highlighting famale resistance that Karen succumbs to. It was an unusual scenario but its uniqueness was perfected with good erotica and storyline. ~ I do struggle sometimes with your grammar in your stories, I feel it is over punctuated at times and rather than the words flowing on the page they sometimes feel choppy as I am halted with so much parenthesis. Perhaps you should read out loud your piece exactly how you have used your punctuation and rethink your sentence structure, as I don't think you are achieving the dramatic effect as you could. You are certainly a very talented writer and this is just my opinion. |
| Date | 11-Jan-2010 |
| Story | The Shopping Trip ~ Bella |
| Message | You have given us yet another delightful original quickie with just enough detail to make the changing room session a success! As a friendly aside, don't rely on spell checks when proof reading as 'off' can slip through when it should be 'of' and 'to' when it should be 'too'. Ask someone to proof read for you and they should be looking out for these basic errors that are easily missed by the writer who can't see for looking! |
| Date | 11-Jan-2010 |
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| Story | Mercy |
| Message | Very nice! Your imagery really works, and the reader can easily 'see' everything unfolding. Left me wanting more!  Q. |
| Date | 11-Jan-2010 |
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| Story | Chocolate with Sophie. by Aahlu |
| Message | Oh this was such a clever piece of work! It not only was about sweets but the main character and her sweet imagination seemed fitting to the title as well. Very cleverly done, with metaphors delivering the detail very skillfully. Loved it. More si vous plait! |
| Date | 11-Jan-2010 |
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| Story | Gayla ~ Part II by phantomsilk |
| Message | So beautifully written, it is riveting. I could not stop once I was a few words into the story. For someone wishing to learn about BDSM, I highly recommend this series. Congratulations Silk! |
| Date | 11-Jan-2010 |
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| Story | Chocolate with Sophie |
| Message | Cool! Dream and reality...not a clear line. I enjoyed reading your story. I could see myself making the tea and forgetting the bags lol |
| Date | 11-Jan-2010 |
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| Story | Shopping Trip |
| Message | Great idea for a story! Is this from a real experience? I think it would be fun to take a man shopping...I love your writing and this was not a disappointment! Keep up the great work! |
| Date | 11-Jan-2010 |
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| Story | Dress Rehearsal |
| Message | Wow! How they could be so relaxed and free in front of others...he sounds so good! He made her forget everyone else and it was amazing! |
| Date | 10-Jan-2010 |
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| Story | Mercy by FLirt |
| Message | Short, sweet and to the point... I like it very much. |
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