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| Date | 04-Sep-2009 |
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| Story | A Hard Rain's Gonna' Fall by Wyliecoyote |
| Message | Utterly gripping and beautiful. A great read as short as it is. |
| Date | 04-Sep-2009 |
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| Story | In the Name of Love |
| Message | This story will not be easy to comment on in spite of it's incredibly powerful message and beautiful writing style. My feelings for Ellen and what she had to go through were so real, and were so powerfully presented......... One of the most powerful and beautifully written stories on the site---and that says something as Flight Attendant and Behind the Mask of Akimo are here as well. What a perfect title. |
| Date | 03-Sep-2009 |
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| Story | Giving You Pleasure by Bella |
| Message | Wow, that very precisely descriptive, erotic style builds like an approaching train again in this piece. It is so well written and has very tight focus. Nothing irrelevant or tangential to slow it down. It moves right along in beautiful mellifluous description. Bella, you should be writing a little every day as you have really strong focused vision, tight precise descriptions. Practice will probably make your work a joy to behold. |
| Date | 03-Sep-2009 |
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| Story | After Dinner Delight by Bella |
| Message | The story is a really sweet little adventure. It is very nicely detailed with little subtleties in the wording and phrasing like he doesn't just kiss her, he "claims her lips." I can point to more than a dozen of them easy but it adds to the smooth flow of the piece. It starts off describing a nice evening out for dinner that sets the mood and ends with a bag, So the story picks up speed like a train out of the station. I very enjoyable read by a writer with some natural talent she is beginning to nurture. Keep at it Bella!! |
| Date | 03-Sep-2009 |
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| Story | Surprise Party by Shaded Voice |
| Message | Wow, this was one wild and wooly ride for a lucky birthday girl. She apparently has a dream of being taken by the boys in the band because she is treated to her heart's desire. I loved the comic ending when she wants to know who wants to go again!! It certainly is well written too as usually with these kinds of stories, it is hard to know who is who after a while but it stays clear right to the end. |
| Date | 03-Sep-2009 |
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| Story | The Dream by DesertWolfAZ |
| Message | This beautifully written story gave new meaning to the words "short and sweet." The metaphors were simply exquisite like "the soft sighs that seemed to well up from her heart and overflow like a spring of sweet water in a desert oasis." That has to be one of the best metaphors I have found in hundreds, perhaps a thousand erotic stories I have read. I was very endeared to this dream-like dreaming girl from the outset to her rising and hoping her dream would become real one day. Wolf, my friend, you can really write!! |
| Date | 03-Sep-2009 |
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| Story | Leather & Passion by Spanky |
| Message | Sex about as rough and raw as it gets. Two lovers let each other have it in a story portrayed in direct description sans adornment. Some like it this way I am sure. I wonder what the neighbors thought? |
| Date | 02-Sep-2009 |
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| Story | A Slightly Different Picnic by Bella |
| Message | This is a really sweet piece of writing. Very hot but romantic at the same time which adds a lot to the action. This story is also very original as it is much closer to real love-making than the often "generic" accounts in similar stories. The details are vivid and often approach singularity as real love making usually is. I just got so caught up in the rich, lovingly paced details/actions as they went along. Got my imagination really going. Nice work Bella!! |
| Date | 23-Aug-2009 |
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| Story | The Frolics Of A Flight Attendant - Stars Above Go |
| Message | An utterly exquisite piece of writing, that had me breathless at times. Oh if only they were all this good! |
| Date | 23-Aug-2009 |
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| Story | A Slightly Different Picnic by Bella |
| Message | A hot detour from a party I think we would all like to make at least once in our lives. The self-pleasuring scene was lovely. |
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